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She's unbreakable

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1She's unbreakable Empty She's unbreakable Wed Aug 22, 2012 6:33 am

Pepper-Roni

Pepper-Roni
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Comment or critique this, I'm not bothered which. This poem is dedicated to my best friend, she's been through a lot recently and I owe her a lot, a hell of a lot. You guys may think you know her wellish, but until you've actually met her you'll probably never truly understand how amazing she really is. Anyhow, enough of my blabbing. Enjoy. Somehow.

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2She's unbreakable Empty Re: She's unbreakable Wed Aug 22, 2012 5:07 pm

Aidiboo

Aidiboo
Batman - Mod

Wow that was beautiful!

I wish I could critique it but I'm too busy with schoolwork. *cries*

One little tiny flaw. You have a typo! in the 8th line from the bottom, I assume you meant make not male? hehe

My favourite lines are :
She never asks for a single thing,
But she's always grateful for whatever you bring.

That was amazing!

Keep it up!

Aidan

3She's unbreakable Empty Re: She's unbreakable Thu Aug 23, 2012 12:52 am

Crazyangel

Crazyangel
Writing Legend - Admin
Writing Legend - Admin

It's beautiful! Keep up the good writing. I'd critique it for you if I could, but I suck at critiquing poetry, sorry. I'm not going to state my favourite lines, because if I do someone may freak out Angelic

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4She's unbreakable Empty Re: She's unbreakable Thu Aug 23, 2012 6:01 am

Xander

Xander
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Sweet Matt, very sweet. I knew you're a sweetie! I just knew it. Anyhow its great, very sweet you little darling.

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